Venting through my writing

I've been under a lot of depression and sadness lately...


Candy Tears

Everything has been lost
no matter what I try to do
And this is the cost
Brush away the ashes and start something new

After all the heartbreak
I feel helpless and abused
there is nothing left for me to make
All of this emotion; I'm so confused

Then the tears being to shed
my wall of sanity is broken
---(haven't thought of this part yet)
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I have learned to love the taste
but grown to hate the pain
can't go on with the troubles I'm faced
In the end there is no gain...



~Could I get some feed back from you on this one, not soo sure about the second stanza(sp?) thank youu everyone

An idea for the second stanza-

From my eyes flow rivers of deep crimsom red
I grasp tight to resolutions golden token.

Really nice job, Mugen.

Thank you Vortex, that Idea has just been a seed for my own idea. hmm very intresting.. perhaps I will finish this tomorrow.


I seem to write very well when My mind is completely scrambled with feelings and strong emotion.

Hello. how about this, well the first line of what the previous person wrote, then....... all of the heartfelt words spoken....

how about....

quote:

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i await those ill-minded words
which dread to be spoken

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..?